http://mrrinka.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] mrrinka.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] alonso_kexano 2011-10-11 07:41 am (UTC)

Несколько строк-куплетов показались лишними, выпадают из уровня, ослабляют общее впечатление.

Но в целом текст - офигительно сильный. Ты потрясающий молодец.
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